Was tryin' something different,and in a was i succeded...Cnc please!

the c4d or wireframe not sure what it is behind her is off
and you got 2 flow here stick to one only
btw try be more creative i dont mean with effects
i mean the render it self is it just floating there?
give the lady some wings or something

but i guess disort is messy so nvm
7.5/10

I'm goin to remake this one,i am pleased with outcome but i know i can do better then this,and you just gave me an idea... tnx brah ^_^

Here is v2,if i can call it v2...its totaly new tag!

Version one is better.
What the hell is two?

LEARN YOUR LIGHTING
:c

Good job ._.

Don't use texts over flows, try to not use texts at all. At least until you master that skill, Your C4D lacks some flows on the right side and the bottom left as well, try to stick with one type of effects like only one of these :Mechanical /Bubbles /Abstract/ Circular c4d/ Hard flow/ Smooth Brush or any type you have in mind. Mexing many types like you did there (Circular/Bubbles, Hard Flow) and god knows what else ._.

Your lighting is bad you should work on that. Flow is messed up try not to throw in so many C4D, there's some random colour that am not liking, depth doesn't look real. I don't like the atmosphere overall, colours seem dead.
Try making the render a tad bit bigger and remove some effects.